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When the stirring of the tides echo lonely with the flow,
and winter rears his icy head and threatens coming snow,
when the very last of flowers, sadly crumple and decay,
when nights become much darker and longer than the day,
when the stars shine subtly brighter than anything I've seen,
then we'll come to realise - we were living in a dream.
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Just a short poem that came to me as I listened to the ocean waves...
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~NotenSMSK Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like this. The meter is well maintained and this is on my birthday :D happy belated birthday to me :D now the first two lines did leave a similar feel as I had with your last work. When the stirring of tides echo "lonely"...? with the flow? If you meant echo the WORD lonely, then add lonely, in quotes... like I just did. And winter would rear his icy head (fine till here) and threatens WITH coming snow should be the expression. Threatens coming snow... well you might be wanting to match the meter and I am personally a bit doubtful that this may as well be correct. Well you may keep it :aww: but the rest was really good :) I liked the expressions and the meter of the work and the theme as well. Good job!
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Thanks very much for another wonderful and in-depth review! I always appreciate all the time and effort you put in! I feel very guilty that I haven't looked at any of your work, or finished your picture yet!

hope to amend all that very shorty! Thanks again! :)
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~NotenSMSK Mar 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No worries, I haven't put much works... except my latest one which might work for you :D as far as the piece is concerned, I don't want to nudge you on that :) take your time :huggle:
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~NotenSMSK Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :la:
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~SplitNinja Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The ocean is something that makes people want to dream.
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I always feel that way. It's mesmerizing.

How have you been getting on anyway? :)
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~SplitNinja Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
When I'm next to the ocean I feel the need to be with it.

Okay, I suppose. Been busy. I'm still not sure where to start for my fund raising if I get accepted by a program for a trip to Italy and Greece. I also plan on getting silk screening classes in December and I plan on going to an anime convention next year in March, even if I'm going to be busy trying to get money for my trip. I'm also in lion dancing club at my school, which takes a lot of my time. Then there's college related stuff I'll have to do because I'm a junior. Got to prepare. So, I've definitely got a tall order ahead of me.^^;
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Wow, looks like you've certainly got a busy schedule there! I hope you get accepted for your trip. I've never been to an anime convention, the only stuff I've found that I like so far is Monster and Death Note. I bet it'll be cool though.

Well good luck with it all! :)
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~SplitNinja Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yup! I'm trying to stay afloat here. There are many animes out there for you.:D I'm a One Piece fan myself.

Thanks!:D
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