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With silent grace she shines aloft.
Somnolent stars suffuse face soft.
Gossamer drifts of shifting clouds
cast shadows on a pearly brow.

Waves spin tales of sailors' yarns,
hidden swathes of ancient charms.
Seabirds' cries and creaking calls,
waters whipped by singing squalls.

Neptune urged with surging shifts,
destruction of the struggling skiffs.
To straggling rocks the sinking ships,
sleeping sands each sadly slips.
My attempt at capturing the mysterious, mythic, wild and spiritual feel of the sea.


As always, any comments and criticisms are very much welcomed!

Thanks for viewing :)
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MoonaBluesky Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really love your style, you paint so powerful images with some words! I'm so frustrated, I haven't the words in english that your poetry deserves so, I'll use my best friend, google translation, in order to try to express what I think of this : Fluid, it's the first word which came to mind when reading these few verses, the sonorities of the English language and the so well chosen words lull my timpans...

Here the sea is a beautiful lady, mysterious and without ages...I feel in the fantastic atmosphere exuded by this poem the influence of Lovecraft, isn't it?
I couldn't love it more!
(sorry for the mistakes--', I wish I was English...)
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
Wow, it's so difficult to respond to your comment. It just means so much to me. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

I wasn't thinking of Lovecraft when I wrote it, but as I'm a huge fan of his, it's more than likely his influence came through.

I live near the sea and I think it is the most beautiful and mysterious thing on earth. The sea shows every emotion, and holds so many secrets.

Your English really isn't bad at all. I can only speak English, and I still make mistakes with it!
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SplitNinja Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The eerie ocean.
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012
Glad you liked it! :)
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SplitNinja Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm glad I read it.:)
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012
Aw, thanks!
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SplitNinja Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:hug:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This has a VERY beautiful flow and a wonderful melody to it. I personally do not read such works in depth so I cannot comment on the theme as such but I will say that the first stanza felt a bit obscure. The second and third were fine and I enjoyed the whole poem still. Really impressive style :) Keep it up but next time keep in mind that a reader knows not what is in your mind ;)
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012
Thanks very much for the kind words. Perhaps the meaning of the first stanza wasn't as clear as I'd hoped. It's about the moon, which I personified, shining softly with sleepy stars drifting across her face.

Thanks again.
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah I see. you are welcome :)
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