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Silently I heard her whispering,
pallid ivory lips soft lisping,
Paper drifting slowly shifting,
from the bedroom's mildewed walls.

In these halls stirs vaguest chanting,
whippoorwills their cries decanting;
psycopomps in midnight sighing,
just outside these mildewed walls.

Huddled forms sprawl stealthily creeping,
countless spiders surging sweeping,
toward the bed where she lies sleeping,
the maiden of these mildewed walls.

Trapped within that pall's mass trembling,
writhes the one I stayed here tending,
all those bleak nights never-ending,
within these wretched mildewed walls.

Blasphemous birds fall shrieking mocking,
through the window thickly flocking,
to snatch the soul of that thing rotting,
my sweet seraphim of cobwebbed halls.
Inspired by Poe's Raven and Lovecraft's Dunwich Horror (the bit where Old Whateley dies)
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AzizrianDaoXrak Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is just a little note to let you know this fabulous piece has been featured!: [link]

I'd appreciate it if you take a peek at some of the other pieces and fave the article to help support the other artists!
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah... Just make it original. Meaning make the story unrelated to any of the above stated works and change a few words that give a prominent hint of inspiration by the Raven... do that and this is a wonderful work.

Just like Poe's Raven, this has a beautiful meter, rhyming, it reads so beautifully when read aloud. I had to read it again and again to enjoy it completely. Then, other than the second stanza, the whole poem was simle to understand with quite a beautiful feel and a matching rhythm and it had an aura of its own. It gave a strange old style feel that few works like the Raven are able to give. Just beautiful!
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Hey, thanks! :)

This piece isn't original at all because it's a tribute to Poe - fan art really! The theme is one of Poe's favourites (death of a beautiful woman) and the rhyming scheme is of course heavily influenced by Poe's Raven.
The influence drawn from The Dunwich Horror is quite minimal. It's just the use of whippoorwills as psychopomps, but that pops up in general mythology a lot anyway, and certainly wasn't Lovecraft's own idea. Nevertheless, Lovecraft's Dunwich Horror was the first time I personally came across the idea, so I felt it was only fair to give it credit. :)

I'm really glad you liked it. Your comments are always very much appreciated. I really love having honest feedback! So thanks again my friend! :hug:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome and then I will look at it as fan art (which is sad :( ) and I have been killing many girls in my poems :D (perhaps wrong way to say that ^^; ) so it is totally a fine idea! The rhyming... well rhyming is just rhyming. It might be criticized as being too similar to Poe's if published (and without adding that it was INDEED influenced by him) but i don't see any other problem otherwise.

Ah... those who creepy works that I didn't get at all ^^ so they are lvoecrafts creation! You are welcome as well :huggle:
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
Thanks again! :D
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :huggle:
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Will7744 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Professional Writer
didn't need the tag line to see the poe influence - first stanzas a golden hook - nicely done
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Wow! May thanks for your kind words - they mean so much! Glad you enjoyed it :)
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KalineReine Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Professional Writer
This is absolutely amazing. :love: I love it. Nice work.
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Oh wow, many thanks! So glad you enjoyed it :)
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KalineReine Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Professional Writer
You're welcome. :glomp:
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Hanachi-Shitsukki Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is... Ah, by the Gods, the words lack! Eloquent, eerie, disturbing... It's everything at once.
It's a calm, slow type of fear. A beautiful, invading fear, that one cannot help but stare at the eldritch things before their eyes.
I love your works, they make me see things i couldn't ever see otherwise.
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
Wow, you're far too kind! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I get stuck for words in the face of such a kind comment. It really means so much!
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OP1atedDreems Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Writer
lovely bit of horror you have here. very entrancing and the rhyming just catches around the tongue. excellent.
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
Wow! Many thanks for the kind comment and I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)
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OP1atedDreems Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Student Writer
you're welcome!
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LesserPandaBear Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Could you please explain line 2 and 3 of the second stanza a little? :3

I quite liked the rest of it though, vivid descriptions, I don't quite understand how something can be both huddled and sprawling, but how-and-ever :L

Great poem.
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Hey thanks. Psychopomps feature in many religions and mythologies and are beings that carry souls to the afterlife. They do not kill. Whippoorwills are nocturnal birds indigenous to North and Central America and are often seen as psychopomps. In these two lines the birds are waiting outside, ready to pounce upon the soul. They finally do this in the last stanza.

The idea with spiders being both sprawling and huddled was that each spider has it legs close to its body, but the whole mass of spiders collectively sprawl across the room.

Thanks again! :)
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LesserPandaBear Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aha! Now I get it. I'll say it again :L Great poem!
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
Many thanks again. It was enjoyable to write :)
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Oriole-of-Silver Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Student Photographer
Wow! I'm like in terrified awe!
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Wow, many thanks! It means a lot to me!
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dark-precipice Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This needs to be written out in the most beautiful font, on a clean white wall, between a bookcase filled with authors such as Baudelaire and Poe and a vase filled with dried flowers.
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Ah, you're always far too sweet and far too kind!

I just love the words "psychopomp" and "whippoorwill". Many thanks to Mr Lovecraft for introducing them to me!
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dark-precipice Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I learned the word psychopomp when I read 'The Dark Half' by Stephen King. The psychopomps there were birds again - but they were sparrows.
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Somnolent-Droid Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
Hmm, I've read only a couple of books by Stephen King. I will definitely have to read more!
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